Please post and respond to thesis statements here. Remember that each thesis statement you come up with should be reflective of something you are truly thinking of researching. Therefore, each statement must have some association with class material in English class as a whole, or perhaps Ancient Civilization class.
*Reminder
Thesis statement rules: a) never a question, b) never a verified fact, and c) always conveys the writer’s opinion about the topic.
September 23, 2008 at 1:03 pm
In 1940, there were a lot of people getting sick.
All the people in 1940, would usually be sick or get sick.
While all the sick people were getting help, the doctors were trying their best to help.
September 23, 2008 at 1:12 pm
1. The Roman culture was successful because of their military strategy.
2. William Shakespeare wrote many plays and even though many of them ended in tragity, he was a great writer.
3. Greek mythology is the roots of Ancient Greece.
September 23, 2008 at 1:16 pm
Savannah- In 1940, there were a lot of people getting sick. this is sort of a verifiable fact because the records show that there were many illnesses and sicknesses in the country.
September 23, 2008 at 1:19 pm
Topic: Egypt
Thesis:
1. Egyptians are very good at art.
2. Egyptians were the first people to make the idea of pyramids.
3. Egyptians were very “God oriented”.
September 23, 2008 at 2:44 pm
Don’t forget our etiquette! First name, last initial ONLY!
Also, I think Rachael’s comment to Savannah was actually meant for Karli.
September 23, 2008 at 3:01 pm
Topic :Guns in Pawn
1.The p90 is a gun that noobs use.
2.The D-eagle is a gun that you should only use in camping in assault
3.The AK is a gun that should be used to mass slaughter the other team
Suggestion:What type of military strategy did they use?(Rachael L)
September 23, 2008 at 3:03 pm
1. The Hologeust was and will always be the worst act of Genicide.
September 23, 2008 at 3:06 pm
Topic:
Ancient Civilization is a fairly hard subject.
The Sumerians were an intelligent race.
THe Bible show many similarities to the Sumerian way of life.
September 23, 2008 at 3:27 pm
WWII had an effect on the way people dressed
THE CHOSEN was a book filled whith WWII
WWII effected most of Europe.
Travis – ancent civ is hard in what aspect?
September 23, 2008 at 3:47 pm
Topic: Cars
1. The lamborgenie is the best car ever
2. An old ford is the ugliest car ever
3. The best color for a car is dark blue
Robin What type of art were the Egyptions good at
September 23, 2008 at 4:20 pm
1. The weapons in WWII were very powerful.
2. The Weapons were not very accurate.
3. The most dangerous weapon was Gas.
September 23, 2008 at 5:37 pm
1) The bubonic plague was the most feared disease in london during shakespear’s time.
2) The iron curtian was timed very well by russia.
3) Chaim Potok was a talented man in about everything he did.
September 23, 2008 at 5:40 pm
1. Music in the 1940’s affected the music we listen to today.
2. Music had its breakthrough in the 1940’s.
3. Jazz music was big in the 1940’s.
Evan- I think your thesis’s are too vague.
September 23, 2008 at 5:56 pm
1. The inventions that happend in the 1940s really effect how we live today
2. The inventions were mostly meant to kill people.
3. Some inventions were poison gas wich was ment to kill an army.
Evan- why do you think dark blue is a good color.
September 23, 2008 at 6:01 pm
1. Fashion in the 1940’s was very simple but elegant.
2. Women started to wear pants in the 1940’s instead of just skirts and dresses.
3. The over all look in the 1940’s was very conservative.
Kelsey- It feels like you are reapting your statement over again maybe use a a famous jazz singer instead.
September 23, 2008 at 6:31 pm
My statements:
1. The F4U Corsair was the coolest looking airplane of World War Two.
2. The movies in the 40s’ were lame.
3. World War Two was unsuccessful for the Germans.
Mike,
Gas was used in more in the First World War. I would choose the Aircraft Carrier instead.
September 23, 2008 at 6:38 pm
1) WWII planes made a huge breakthrough durring the middle of the war.
2) The P-51 instantly became the best plane on the U.S.’s side.
3) It didn’t matter what plane you flew back then it mosty mattered on the piolet.
Mike: wasn’t gas used in WWI only, because we had gas masks in WWII
September 23, 2008 at 6:43 pm
Nick:if WWII wold have gone on longer then the Germans would have brought brand new jet fighters to the table so the timing was a little off, but the Germans had techonlogy that we didn’t have until after the war.
September 23, 2008 at 6:53 pm
1. Looking at past world wars and the reasons they started it seems that a world war three is inevitable.
2. WWI was really excalated by the series of treaty’s creating a dominoe affect.
3. If Hitler and his germans were not stoped in WW2 his dream of a primarily German world would might have come true.
September 23, 2008 at 6:54 pm
1. The Trianon in Versailles, France was exquisite.
2. The Trianon in Versailles was one of the most magnificent buildings ever built.
3. The Trianon was magnificent because of its architecture.
Derek: What was it that made the P-51 become the best plane on the U.S.’s side?
September 23, 2008 at 6:56 pm
Evan What do you mean the Lamborgini is the best car. Do you mean for looks,speed or handleing.
September 23, 2008 at 6:59 pm
1. Romeo and Juliet is the most classic love story in history.
2. The style of writers in the 1940’s is a way different style than now.
3. Movies were better in the 1940’s than now.
September 23, 2008 at 6:59 pm
I like Eric’s thesis alot!
September 23, 2008 at 7:10 pm
I really like Rachel L’s thesis statment because she was very discriptive.
September 23, 2008 at 7:13 pm
The holocast was the worst tragedy in World War Two.
September 23, 2008 at 7:14 pm
If the U.S. did not drop the bombs we would have lost the World War Two.
September 23, 2008 at 7:15 pm
If the U.S. entered the war earlier many peoples lives could have been saved.
September 23, 2008 at 7:19 pm
Topic: Animals in WWII
Thesis:
Animals were taken care of in WWII
Animals survived WWII
All animals had shelter in WWII
Response:
The holocaust effected and changed many lives of today.
September 23, 2008 at 7:20 pm
1. with out planes the attack on purl harbor wouldn’t have happened and America would have never got involved in WW2
2. the P-38 lightning was the most versatile plane used in WW2
3. tanks were a great asset to the Germans
Bill, your thisis about the inventions of the 1940s and that it affected us if good but be more specific.
September 23, 2008 at 7:43 pm
topics
1.hairstyles of the 1940s were huge
2.the weapons of WWII were indestructable
3.the 1900s time period was filled with tragedy
RESPONSE:
billy whe you say “the iventions were mostly meant to kill us” ,be more spacific as to what inventions you are talking about because if you wrote that in a thesis paper, people who read it would be confused as to which inventions you were talking about.
September 23, 2008 at 7:48 pm
1.) Bill Cliton was one of the greatest presidents in american history.
2.) Most republican candidates care more about war then the economy.
3.) The 1980’s was the greatest decade for the advancment of music.
Savannas ccomment about movies is good, but it is not very discriptive.
September 23, 2008 at 7:57 pm
Topic-!940’s
a.Disease’s in the 1940’s were worse than they are now.
b.Gone with the wind was a good movie about the 1940’s
c.The computer made a big impact on american history.
September 23, 2008 at 7:58 pm
Karli-
be specific on the diseases
September 23, 2008 at 8:01 pm
1. Soccer is the most popular sport in the world.
2. Soccer is easy to learn.
3. Anyone can play soccer.
September 23, 2008 at 8:06 pm
1.If Germany hadn’t invaded Poland WWII would have never begun.
2. If the U.S. hadn’t joined WWII so late it would’ve been over more quickly.
3.If less countries were involved in WWII it would have been over more quickly.
Connor D. I like your idea about planes, but what about the P-38 made it more versatile?
September 23, 2008 at 8:11 pm
Derek
be more specific about the planes like did it droped a bomb or did it killed many people
September 23, 2008 at 8:13 pm
2. WWII was the worst war in American History
3. There will be an other World War.
September 23, 2008 at 8:18 pm
Derek wat made the P-51 so great. How did it become so popular.
September 23, 2008 at 8:18 pm
I did not mean to copy David.
September 23, 2008 at 8:19 pm
-absract expressionism in the 1940s was really cool
-the holocaust was one of the worst things that has happened in history
-World War 2 had a bad effect on Italy as well as Germany and Japan
Maia, add a little bit more detail about the timing of the iron curtain.
September 23, 2008 at 9:00 pm
Madison- what made the trianon so exquisit. maybe list some of its features.
September 23, 2008 at 9:05 pm
1) The music of the 1940s was the bases for the rock and roll music we listen to now.
2) World War II had a major impact on the fashions or the 1940s.
3) Lincons assination put the country in major shock.
David, be more specific about your statementd. They are a bit broad.
September 23, 2008 at 9:25 pm
The rules of a theisis is never a fact never a question always convays the author opinion. People please use theisis format.
September 24, 2008 at 10:23 am
DAVID SAY you need to be more specific.
about soccer because it not the popular sport in the world.
September 24, 2008 at 2:23 pm
Topic Cars of the 21st century
The lamborgini is the best car of the 21st century because of its engine, slim style, and developed transmition.
September 24, 2008 at 2:24 pm
Auto Indstry
1.Industries have increase over the years.
2.The amount of cars daily have increased explosively.
3.Cars have been getting more expenisive over the years.
September 24, 2008 at 2:46 pm
1) The hairstyles of the 1940s had a lot of dynamics.
2) Chaim Potok was a pretty descriptive writer.
3) Teens should not be allowed to have their boyfriend at their home, alone for a long period of time.
Response for everybody: would you be able to write an essay about your topic?
September 24, 2008 at 2:58 pm
1 everybody should be able to read.
2 all people should enjoy reading.
3 people need reading to live with every day life
September 24, 2008 at 2:59 pm
Revision:
1. If Germany hadn’t invaded Poland WWII would have never begun.
2. If the U.S. hadn’ t joined WWII so late it would have been over more quickly.
3. If less countries were involved in WWII not as many people would have died.
September 24, 2008 at 3:06 pm
My new thesis is-
Technology in world war II made a big impact.
September 24, 2008 at 3:08 pm
Revision:
1) If volleyball was a better sport more people would play it.
2) If people didn’t move during volleyball then it wouldn’t be as fun.
3) If volleyball is boring to you, you are not doing it right.
Giseleine- your second thesis is more of a fact than a thesis
September 24, 2008 at 3:16 pm
1. Art in the 1940s had different messages in it than modern art.
2. During world war two when men were at war, women had a taste of independence.
3. The Holocaust was a huge part of the history of the world.
Robyn- what do you mean by “if volleyball is boring to you, youre not doing it right.”? That is nat an opinion or a fact.
September 24, 2008 at 6:40 pm
My new thesis is
- Soccer is easy to play because it is easy to play it’s becoming the most poplular sport in the world.
September 24, 2008 at 7:23 pm
Th hairstyles of the 1900s used so much hairspray that the people are responsable for the deteriorating ozone layer.
September 24, 2008 at 7:40 pm
The Summerian race was the only reason we made technological inovation as advanced as we did so quickly.
September 25, 2008 at 9:00 pm
My three thesis statements are about Biking
1. Every one knows how to bike but only a handfull people can bike very well
2. Road biking is about suffering and pushing your self
3. Mountain biking is about risk and reward