Reminders:
Rules for a strong thesis: a) Never question b) Never a fact c) Always conveys writer’s opinion
Introductory paragraphs include: Attention grabbing topic sentence(s), strong thesis statement, and essay map (sentence(s) that give the reader a sense of how the thesis will be supported (body paragraph topics)
Deadline: Thursday by 3:15
Respond to one another’s thesis (need to say more than good job–explain what is good or weak)
March 9, 2009 at 4:00 pm
hi, this is Illianna
my thesis 4 Lord of the Flies is: Survival of the fittest is a recurring topic in Lord of the Flies
~Illianna
March 10, 2009 at 7:37 pm
My Thesis statement fir Lord of the flies is: Boys left with out parent go crazy, weak kids die out, and they turn in to savages.
March 11, 2009 at 2:54 pm
Illianna i like your thesis statement but don’t forget to add your paragraph!!! In your paragraph you probably need to add more details!!
March 11, 2009 at 3:04 pm
When stranded on a island with out rules, no parents, and boys can run wild they will act like savages. Boys left with out parents go crazy, weaker kids die out, and they turn in to savages. In Lord of the Flies when the boys turn into savages they pick their own rulers, and the survival of the fittest takes place. When the weaker ones die out, the older more fit boys will get more food. When no food is available you will go hungry for the night. When food is available you may eat until you are almost full or full. With no rules the boys may decide what they want to do, and do what ever. By having no rules the boys are able to kill one another.
March 11, 2009 at 6:32 pm
Thesis: The boys’ survival instincts turn the boys into savage beings.
Paragraph: Lord of the Flies; an adventure story by William Golding about a group of English schoolboys turned savage while stranded on an island. They need everything they’ve got to be resourceful enough to survive and get help. But survival instincts don’t bring out the best in the boys as the novel progresses. The boys’ survival instincts turn the boys into savage beings. Even though the boys were surviving, their time on the island soon became unpleasant due to hunting, tribal religion, and warfare.
March 11, 2009 at 6:34 pm
The book “Lord of the Flies” generally states that man is basically savage and only held back by society. However this is a flawed statement. Man is basically good, and is not a savage controlled by civilization. If man was savage by nature then how does something like civilization develop. The development of basically moral religions such as Christianity and Judaism also demonstrates the presence of moral instinct. Great philosophers such as Confucius also argued for this point.
March 11, 2009 at 6:35 pm
Madison,
Your thesis is good, but it would flow better if you could phrase it a different way.
Illianna: Same as Madison. Your thesis is good, but you also need to have the introductory paragraph, too.
March 11, 2009 at 7:14 pm
Rachel it’s engaging but there isn’t an essay map. I don’t know how you’re going tho prove your thesis
March 11, 2009 at 8:19 pm
hi, this is Illianna
yes i know that i need a paragraph, and that is what i am posting right now.
Thesis: Survival of the fittest is a recurring topic in Lord of the Flies.
Paper: Survival of the Fittest
Lord of the Flies by William Golding has many recurring topics, but the one that stands out the most is: survival of the fittest. The boys in this novel turn against each other. They find that to survive, you have to be at the top, cared for by others, or be able to cope by yourself. The first one to die is an un-named boy that has a birth-marked face; he was a victim of the fire that happened very early on in the book, there is only one solution to his disappearance, he was not strong or fast enough to run away from the fire. The second one to die is a boy that went out on the first expedition to survey the island, his name is Simon. He was not thinking properly when he went into the camp of the savages; he did not have the sense to protect himself. The last and best example of this rule was Piggy, he could not see well enough to move out of the way of the boulder that was destined to kill him, he also had a disease that made him be slower than everyone else in the book, if the other boys had not been kind; he would have died earlier on in the book.
March 11, 2009 at 8:35 pm
hi, me again.
yes, that is 7, not 8 sentences, i am rather proud of myself 4 putting it all into 7 sentences. i hope everyone gets it in on time. good luck everyone ;o)
<’)))< fishy!!!
The following statement is true.
The previous statemet is false.
yes, i am tierd, that is what i am a little hyper, well, okay, maybe a lot, but that is not the point.
~Illianna BYE!
March 11, 2009 at 9:05 pm
your thesis and your paragraph is really you did a great job explening in your first paragraph
March 12, 2009 at 9:06 am
Alec i like your thesis and your paragraph. It knd of seems like you are repeating the same thing over and over again.
March 12, 2009 at 9:15 am
The Lord of the Flies by William Golding is a very unique book. The plot is about preteenage boys stuck on an island with no parent who, eventually, turn savage. But is this all that it seems. The boys on the island knew they were turning savage, but didn’t care enough to stop it. This is because of the “accidental” killings of the other boys, the followings of Jack, and the clear killing nature of the young’uns. These all contributed to the known change to savage beasts.
March 12, 2009 at 9:23 am
The Lord of the flies was a very interesting book. It was a bout these kids that were stuck on an island. They end up going crazy. Had there been grownups on the island the kids would have been not as savage and would have been almost civilized. The kids in the biginning were all listening to ralph but it didn’t las long becuase they are kids.The next reason is that there were bad norms on the island but they are bad and good. They next is that children are not naturally evil or good it just depends what and how the kids were grown up and raised to be.
March 12, 2009 at 3:12 pm
Alec, you have a really good first paragraph. The transition sentencd is also really good, but you might want to sight Confucius.
March 12, 2009 at 5:48 pm
billy I’m not sure what your thesis is exactly. might want to clarify on that
March 12, 2009 at 6:11 pm
hi, this is Illianna
Madison: instead of ‘and boys can run wild’ u could put ‘and the freedom to do whatever they want’ also refer to ‘the boys’ as children, or individuals, or something like that. also where u say ‘you will hunt for food’ u could say they will hunt for food, because u r switching plural/singular. i think that it has a very strong ending and begining, but (it might b me) it was a little hard to follow. other than that it was great, and u could go somewhere with
that train of thought. thnx 4 reviewing me ;o)
Billy:u need more word veriety. instead of ‘kids’ all the time, u could say ‘the boys’ or in some cases ‘they’. it wasn’t a very strong ending, but the begining was strong, it was also very easy to follow, it just petered out, and someone may lose intrest quickly. other than that it was very good, and i think u could go somewhere with this. ;o)
~Illianna
the following statement is true.
the previous statement is false.
March 12, 2009 at 6:13 pm
yes, me again.
also i would say what Alechelix (aka alec) said.
yes that is all. Bye!
~Illianna
March 12, 2009 at 6:45 pm
Sean i don’t really know were your thesis statement is but otherwise i think it was very well written
March 12, 2009 at 7:16 pm
Illianna, I think you jump to quick into your thesis statement, at the expence of a good hook. Maybe take a quote of the survival of the fittest as a hook? Otherwise, I think it was well writen.
March 12, 2009 at 7:18 pm
Alec, same thing I told Illianna. I think you need more of a hook, and less jumping in to your thesis statement. I also think it cuts off abruptly without much transition. Your points are a little spread out, but otherwise, I think your points are well thought-out and will be a great essay.