http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/ A Convenient Classroom Tool Thu, 12 Nov 2009 04:01:42 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/#comment-2693 Taryn Fri, 13 Mar 2009 13:02:16 +0000 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/?p=255#comment-2693 Karli, I really like your opening sentence it is a very good atteniton grabber. Karli, I really like your opening sentence it is a very good atteniton grabber.

]]> http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/#comment-2690 Maia P Fri, 13 Mar 2009 04:05:09 +0000 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/?p=255#comment-2690 Josh your thesis and essay map are very good. It is clear and straight to the point. You make it very easy to relate to,and it puts the reader into the shoes of the characters of the book very well. Great job. Josh your thesis and essay map are very good. It is clear and straight to the point. You make it very easy to relate to,and it puts the reader into the shoes of the characters of the book very well. Great job.

]]> http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/#comment-2689 Maia P Fri, 13 Mar 2009 03:57:02 +0000 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/?p=255#comment-2689 Sam, your opening statement is very catchy and good, but you dont have an opinion. Your just stating diiferent facts about the book. Sam, your opening statement is very catchy and good, but you dont have an opinion. Your just stating diiferent facts about the book.

]]> http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/#comment-2686 Sean Fri, 13 Mar 2009 02:28:10 +0000 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/?p=255#comment-2686 Karli, don't you think that a definition for a hook is a bit cliche'? Also, there isn't much of a transition into your second paragraph. Other than that, I think your thesis and points will serve you well in the future. Karli, don’t you think that a definition for a hook is a bit cliche’? Also, there isn’t much of a transition into your second paragraph. Other than that, I think your thesis and points will serve you well in the future.

]]> http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/2009/03/09/incognito-squirrels-lof-thesis-statements-w-intro-paragraphs/#comment-2685 Sean Fri, 13 Mar 2009 02:25:51 +0000 http://css8thgradeenglish.wordpress.com/?p=255#comment-2685 Moorea, I think that your first paragraph was "short, sweet and to the point". Unfortunately, I don't see how your projective proofs support your thesis at all. But, then again, I haven't read the essay so I wouldn't know. I also think you need more of a transition into your first paragraph. Good luck on your essay! Moorea, I think that your first paragraph was “short, sweet and to the point”. Unfortunately, I don’t see how your projective proofs support your thesis at all. But, then again, I haven’t read the essay so I wouldn’t know. I also think you need more of a transition into your first paragraph. Good luck on your essay!

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