Reminders:
Rules for a strong thesis: a) Never question b) Never a fact c) Always conveys writer’s opinion
Introductory paragraphs include: Attention grabbing topic sentence(s), strong thesis statement, and essay map (sentence(s) that give the reader a sense of how the thesis will be supported (body paragraph topics)
Deadline: Thursday by 3:15
Respond to one another’s thesis (need to say more than good job–explain what is good or weak)
March 11, 2009 at 5:20 pm
Norms are unwritten rules. They are standards of behavior for people to be part of a society. An example of a norm is table manners. A civilized person should eat with a fork, a knife, or spoon, and not with their fingers. If a person ate with their hands or off another persons plate, the rest of the people at the table would not like it. That person would not be invited over again, and might be asked to leave. Due to the loss of norms on the island, the boys became savages. Once norms were thrown out there was no society, every man for himself, and survival of the strongest. After the boys arrive the norms slowly disappear. In the end the distruction of the norms lead to violence.
March 11, 2009 at 6:32 pm
What would you do and what would you need if your plane crashed and you landed on middle of nowhere. Surviving in anywhere would not be very easy thing to do. If you were with a group of grownups, it would be less hard, but if you were with a group of kids, it would be little bit harder. Surviving is not easy thing to do. In order to survive in anywhere you need things such as food and shelter, strong determined mindset, and you have to work as a group(team). When you are by yourself with bunch of kids, there will be nobody to tell you what to do and what not to do. Anything can happen when you want to survive. Either it’s bad or not, anything can happen.
March 11, 2009 at 8:22 pm
According to Confucius, man needs to be taught to be good. Without being taught to be good, mankind would not be where it is now. Childish behavoir occurs naturally, but with learned goodness, society as a whole has become more and more civil. Roussau said, “To be and to seem became two totally different things: an from this distinction sprang insolent pomp and cheating trickery…” According to a study by Tom Atlee, ” Human nature is not one thing, neither good or bad overall”.
March 11, 2009 at 8:53 pm
giseine you did a great job explening the topic you choose and you have a good thesis too.
March 11, 2009 at 10:26 pm
Fear
“Let me assert my firm belief that the only thing we have to fear is fear itself” (F.D.Roosevelt). Fear has the power to cause mankind to change its ways entirely. Fear can create delusions in mankind, cause people to be in denial, and it can cause people to hide their fear through violence.
March 11, 2009 at 10:29 pm
Rachel,
Your starting analogy is good. It helps put into perspective the norms of our society. The only thing you need right now is to check for a few punctuation problems, but there are very few.
March 12, 2009 at 7:39 am
Nick,
Your starting sentence is really good. You already have one intext citation, and that is really good. You need few more sentences,but other wise it’s really good.
March 12, 2009 at 7:42 am
Rachel, your beginning paragraph was good, but I don’t see your essay map. I think that you could be a little more specific in your thesis statement. You have done a good job so far though.
March 12, 2009 at 7:43 am
Giseleine,
Your introduction paragraph is good, but i can’t really see your thesis.
March 12, 2009 at 7:45 am
Have you ever realized that if young human beings didn’t have guardians constantly looking over them, they wouldn’t know the difference between right and wrong?Lord of the Flies is a very good example of how human beings would lose their innocence and gain ignorance in a non civilized society with no one (elder) to look after them. Lord of the Flies is an example of how young people would act with guardians, how they would act without guardians, and how innocence would be lost and ignorance gained in a society without elders.
March 12, 2009 at 9:09 am
The book “Lord of the Flies” generally states that man is basically savage and only held back by society. However this is a flawed statement. Man is basically good, and is not a savage controlled by civilization. If man was savage by nature then how does something like civilization develop. The development of basically moral religions such as Christianity and Judaism also demonstrates the presence of moral instinct. Great philosophers such as Confucius also argued for this point.
March 12, 2009 at 9:13 am
Marissa yours is great at grabbing attention but there isn’t a clear essay map. Other than that looks good.
March 12, 2009 at 12:51 pm
nick, i think that your thesis statement is very good. I like the quote that you use from franklin d. Roosevelt and I think that it is a nice way to start off your thesis paper.
March 12, 2009 at 12:55 pm
David, I think that your thesis is a very good start, but i think that you need to widen your variety of words for your intro paragraph. You continuously use the words”surviving in anywhere”.
March 12, 2009 at 12:57 pm
Alec i like how you are arguing something completely opposite than what other people are arguing! The only thing is that I don’t clearly see your essay map.
March 12, 2009 at 2:03 pm
Fear is the power that drives mankind to survive. As shown in “Lord of The Flies”, it is the grounding point of which choices are made. Some people make their choices better than others in live, or die situations. If their is no fear how would it be possible to worry about living, or dying? Surviving is fear of death, not acquiring skills to live will lead to an ultimate failure, death, and surviving is a personal stand point.
March 12, 2009 at 2:06 pm
David I am not sure where your thesis is in your post, but If my hunch is correct, the essay map is more of a factual list. Sorry if I am wrong.
March 12, 2009 at 2:28 pm
Travis you have a good start, but your thesis and essay map arent clear. I like how you started your paragraph.
March 12, 2009 at 2:30 pm
Alec I thought your thesis and essay map were very clear and I liked them, but you could be a little stronger in the begining.
March 12, 2009 at 5:51 pm
travis good essay map, but might want to lead into thesis a little more
March 12, 2009 at 5:58 pm
Travis,
Your essay map is clear and well done, but i don really see your thesis.
March 12, 2009 at 6:25 pm
Survival is the main objective in instances like those in Lord of the flies. The three key elements of survival for an elongated period of time is food, water, and shelter. If you don’t have all three of these you will not survive for very long.
March 12, 2009 at 6:26 pm
Travis I dont see your thesis ro Esay map, but your begining is good
March 12, 2009 at 7:54 pm
Travis, I think that you have an awesome start, but you need to make your thesis statement and your essay map clearer. Right now ther are just random thoughts.
March 12, 2009 at 8:05 pm
Derek,
You have a thesis statement and essay map, but you do not seem to have much of an attention grabber. You might want to try an analogy in which there is an example showing that someone’s main objective was surviving in the wilderness.